in class writing

Sam:  Criteria A: 4
          Criteria B: 9
          Criteria C: 5


Sam’s literary analysis is excellent because she has great explanation of the play. For instance, she talks about foreshadowing and gives multiple quotes to develop her point of view. Performance wise, she has great details of how she used her voice and body language. It was so detailed that she talks about every part of her body. She also has a strong introduction that explains her thesis. Her paragraphs are clear to read with no grammar mistakes. 

From Sam’s essay, one of the things I learned is that for every paragraph, I need strong topic and ending sentence, so that a paragraph would be fully completed. Also I need a clear structure of telling what this paragraph is talking about, because it would be more convenient to the readers.


Julia:  Criteria A: 4
                       B: 9
                       C: 4

Julia has a strong intro that lists all the significant themes in her play, and she has detailed explanation on all of them. Several paragraphs are really straight forward  because she jumps straight into what she wants to show and how she did it without a general topic sentence at first, which could be a good thing because it is easy to read and understand why she writes this paragraph. She also uses a lot of technical words to describe her acting. 


I learned that I need a interesting title of this play so that it can attract readers. Also I need to keep each paragraph in an ideal length, so that the reader won’t get bored. I also learned that a supportive and interesting conclusion can really level up the whole essay. 

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